I love Facebook ads. (Surprise, surprise.)
I love spending my days putting together campaigns in the Power Editor. I seriously geek out over targeting. I even enjoy a little Photoshop action while creating images.
But I hate writing Facebook ad copy. It’s just . . . not my thing. Maybe it has to do with HOW FREAKIN’ HARD IT CAN BE.
Sadly there are no Facebook ads without some text. This isn’t a medium where you can let the image speak for itself and expect results. (Just you wait, Pinterest advertising. I’m coming for you!)
So that means that like it or not, writing ad copy is a big part of my job. A lot of people hate it just as much as I do, so they’re happy to hand that part off to someone else. And thanks to my lovely clients who depend on me and my skills to get results, I’ve gotten very good at something I hate doing. (Thanks guys!)
What’s my secret?
It’s actually pretty simple: I have a system for the actual creation of the copy, and five rules for writing great ad copy that I stick to every single time. And they’re about to become your own guidelines for writing your own ads that get quality clicks.
But first, let’s get you set up.
Here’s my system for ad writing:
- Open up a Google Doc, a Word doc, Pages, TextEdit, or your word processor of choice. If you want to use classic tools like paper and pen, go wild.
- If you’re like me and your attention span has been shot to hell by pretty much everything on the ol’ Internet, close everything else: tabs, windows, applications. The only thing I might leave open is my landing page for inspiration.
- Open your favorite pomodoro timer like Tomatoes or Bolognesa. These timers are going to give you 25 minutes for you to focus, focus, focus. It may be tough to go that long, but here’s what I want you to do:
- Write everything that comes into your head. Don’t stop until that timer goes off! If I can do it, you can do it.
“Um, write what? What should this ad copy say?”
Below you’ll find my top five rules for writing truly effective Facebook ad copy. You won’t use every single one of them in each piece of copy you write – you’ll see that it’s pretty hard to combine #4 and #5 (but not impossible). For each rule I’ll also give you an example so you can see some of these techniques in action. (Note: all of my examples aren’t necessarily from Facebook ads….but they could be because they really are that good).
1. Don’t try to be clever – just be clear.
Facebook is noisy, yo! Pictures of your friends’ kids, their vacations, Buzzfeed quizzes, Candy Crush scores, posts from the 10+ groups you’re in . . . need I say more? The landscape of Facebook is way overdeveloped. Translation? There’s no room for any messaging that I need to think about to understand.
Make sure your ad tells me what I’m going to get if I click, what problem you’re going to solve, or how I’m going to end up feeling as a result of what you’re offering. No more, no less.
2. Avoid all mention of your brand.
If you worked hard on your branding, the name of your program or service, a pithy slogan or your spirit animal, that’s awesome. They do NOT belong in your ad copy. I have never heard of you or your business before. I don’t even know your business’s name and I don’t need to right now. Focus on getting me to click, and I can get to know you and your brand later on. (The same is true for your landing page, by the way.)
3. Speak directly to the right people.
“Thinking about becoming a coach?”
“Hate your day job?”
“All day on social media without seeing real results in your biz?”
I start off a lot of my ads with a questions because it pulls the right people in and gets them to listen. If you see an ad that starts with one of those questions and your response is NOPE! then you’re going to keep scrolling right on past my ad. Thank you! That’s exactly what I was hoping you’d do. If you don’t have the problem that my business helps people solve, then I don’t want you to click on my ad because I don’t want you to bring down the conversion rate on my landing page. (Sorry! Just remember: we’re leaving people OUT of the party.)
4. Make it emotional.
Your product or service solves a problem, right? So that means that people are “suffering” in some way, and you’re there to end the suffering.
Melodramatic much?? Yes, I know. Most of us aren’t in the business of ending human suffering. People who are struggling with Facebook ads probably aren’t losing sleep over it (I hope!) – but they are losing money. So if people in my audience are “suffering” even the tiniest bit, then your peeps have GOT to be in some kind of minor emotional pain.
If you’re in the life coaching, health and nutrition, personal finance, or tons of other industries, writing emotional copy is going to be pretty simple. Think about the fears people have, the mindset issues that are holding them back, or any emotions they might be feeling that would make them your ideal customer. Then speak to those emotions.
5. Keep it ridiculously simple.
This works for any industry anywhere. No fluff, just a clear call-to-action to get their hands on your free content that will allow them to [insert the solution you provide].
A note on calls-to-action:
Don’t be afraid to include copy that may seem over-the-top obvious like “Click here to sign up” or “Grab your free guide here:.” Lots of people need step-by-step instructions – give ‘em what they need!
And there you have it: my top five tips for writing ads that not only get clicks, but the RIGHT kind of clicks. Because there’s nothing worse than spending your money on the wrong people, you know what I’m saying?
I want to do a mini ad-writing workshop right here on the blog. I had a great time with this workshop, but every party’s gotta end sometime.
Check out some of the feedback I gave people below and see if you can apply it to your own copy!
Great tips! Thanks!
You’re so welcome Kimber. :)
You’re so welcome Kimber. :)
Loved this article! Nice easy steps, and it takes away a lot of the stress of writing copy.
Thanks Rita! Are you working on getting some ad campaigns up and running? Care to workshop your ad copy?
Thanks Rita! Are you working on getting some ad campaigns up and running? Care to workshop your ad copy?
Awesome stuff Claire. Really handy
So glad to hear that, Natalie!
Great post, Claire! :)
So I’m going to start running some FB ads once my launch sequence begins for my Avatar Discovery Course. I’m thinking my ad copy will go something like this (based on the exact words I’ve seen people use to describe this problem): “Tired of trying to make up a profile for a customer who hasn’t even bought from you yet? Stop the guesswork and get my free tips for sleuthing your ideal customer avatar. http://www.theavatardiscoverycourse.com/“
Hey Eleanore, thanks for swinging by and joining the workshopping party. :)
I love how you’re using the exact words people have used to describe their problem. My only suggestion would be to somehow rework that question into shorter pieces, like:
“How do I come up with a customer profile if no one’s even bought from me yet???”
This is one of the toughest things about any business, especially if you’re just starting out. Stop all the guesswork – click here to grab these 10 (<–just inventing a number here) free tips for sleuthing your ideal customer avatar.
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Does that make sense? Maybe test out your version and mine with the same image and see which one gets a better click-through rate!
Thanks, Claire! I like your rewording! Makes it more punchy… :) I will try that version for sure. Appreciate all you do!
My pleasure! Keep me posted on how your ads go.
Hey Tony, thanks for stopping by AND being the first to step up for a little copy workshopping. :)
I like how you open the copy with a question, but I think the entire copy can be a lot more specific. Lots of people DO feel like they’re missing out on life but “missing out” has different definitions for different people. Some people are in the wrong jobs, others are in the wrong relationships, others are too afraid to go after some risky but awesome opportunities. So what does “missing out” mean for your target audience? And along the same lines, what does “being awesome” mean? For me, “being awesome” would be about dragging myself away from the computer and also being more productive in my working hours. That’s probably not your definition of awesome, right? So I would answer those questions about your definitions of those words and then be super specific in your copy! Does that make sense?
Thanks, Claire! Makes total sense and something we’re not completely sure of yet either :) I definitely need to get more specific with our site copy before I start advertising with it.
I appreciate you taking the time!
This post came in from Caylie via email who’s having some problems with the comments section on my website. Sorry Caylie! But love that you wanna get in on this workshopping action.
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Hi Claire,
So grateful for your mini workshop offer. Here is my copy for a Facebook Ad that leads to a post about guest blogging that includes an offer for this: https://gumroad.com/l/VcrYE
Headline: Google says guest blogging is pointless. WRONG. Click to find out why.
On image text: Google is lying about guest blogging
Subheading: Guest blogging ISN’T dead
Text: Matt Cutts of Google recently announced guest blogging was no longer effective. He obviously didn’t consider humans related to humans, not Google bots. You need this info.
CTA: Learn more.
Would love your feedback!
Thanks, Caylie
Feedback time:
Headline: Love it. It’s a little abrasive which really works on someone like me; so long as your target customer isn’t someone who needs a little coddling, this is awesome.
On image text: This might be going a little too far since Cutts was talking about guest blogging from an SEO point of view, not from an audience building point of view. I agree with you, by the way, but I think something like your subheading would work better as a way to grab people’s attention with your image.
Subheading: Do you mean the little explanation under the headline? I’d add more here than just a quick line, maybe even just the first few lines of your guest post, prompting people to want to read more.
Text: I love everything but “you need this info.” Yes, people need to know that guest posting isn’t dead, but I find statements like this to be less powerful than something like: You could be missing out on major opportunities for growth if you think guest posting isn’t a good strategy.
But I always love a good test: put up the same ad with this small tweak in the second version, and see what people respond to more!
I struggle with this so much too! I typically opt for the super-simple because it’s easier and I don’t have to spend 25 minutes getting it right. lol But I imagine if I spent more time on it I would get better results.
The next ad I run will probably be getting people onto my email list before my October launch. So I’ll likely send them to my free pricing art webinar: http://www.lauracgeorge.com/email-signup
And here’s a stab at some copy??
Afraid your art is too expensive and no one will buy it? Click to get my free video where I’ll teach you my foolproof method for pricing art perfectly, every time.
What do you think? Too wordy?
Hey Laura! I actually wrote this post specifically because you posted in some Facebook group that it was a struggle of yours. Sorry for taking so long but thanks for the inspiration! :)
I think your copy is great – nice and simple, not too wordy. My suggestion would be to test it out against another version where you write from the artist’s perspective like this:
“How much should I charge for my art work? How do I walk that line between two much and too little??”
Click below to watch this free video where I’ll teach you how to price art perfectly, every time: [link to the video]
It’s a different approach but that’s one of my favorite things to test out with ads. You use those two versions of the copy with the exact same image to the exact same people, and your click-through-rate and conversion tracking will give you your winner!
Great idea! I had never thought about running two ads at the same time. Can’t believe I inspired your post – makes me feel pretty damn special. ;)
I really struggle with ad copy!! My opt-in right now is a free cheat sheet that small business owners can use for their customers so it feels hard to explain it succinctly. I’m currently running an ad with the “Download” button. Results are poor. Here’s a link to my opt-in: http://www.jennifercrego.com/google-plus-customer-reviews-cheat-sheet/
Copy: Use customer reviews to increase your local search ranking!
Google+ customer reviews are the most influential reviews for local SEO but often the hardest reviews to get.
The solution? Simple step-by-step instructions in an easy to read printable. Share this cheat sheet with your customers and you’ll see an increase in customer reviews.
Download your copy today!
Link: Get More Google+ Customer Reviews for Your Business
Description: This easy cheat sheet will walk your customers through how to leave your business a Google+ review. Increase your Google+ customer reviews and you’ll increase your online visibility.
Caption: Google+ Customer Reviews
I’d so appreciate your feedback! Thanks!!
Hey Jennifer,
What an interesting offer! I think you can definitely find a way to clarify exactly why people need this (like myself!).
Here’s the thing: I feel like in both your ad copy and on your landing page, the text is talking to someone who knows what local search means, has at least a basic knowledge of how SEO works and already has experience trying to get G+ reviews.
I would step waaaaay back and start brainstorming what the overall benefit of getting those reviews are. Increased local search ranking? That doesn’t make sense to lots of non SEO-people. Getting found by a LOT more people on Google? Getting more clients without having to hustle for them? Now you’re talking my language! Write new copy that focuses on those benefits. Tell me how this free content of yours is going to rock my business, and then give me a chance to get it! (And I would rework or get rid of the line “Share this cheat sheet with your customers” – it’s actually a different call to action, and people might thing you want them to share your post.)
Now I haven’t tested this but I feel like the Download CTA turns some people off. They don’t know what they’re downloading, you know? So I would try the Learn More CTA.
And finally, what about split testing your landing page and trying a version that doesn’t have the image on it? My eye got drawn to the image (which may or may not be the actual cheat sheet?) and away from your copy. Don’t give me the whole process on the landing page; trade it for my email address.
Do you have GA set up and tracking the conversion rate of your landing page?
And finally, this post might help you figure out exactly what isn’t working with the ads you’ve already run: http://www.clairepells.com/fix-your-ads/
Hope that helps!
Thanks so much, Claire! This is super helpful!!! :)
Just finished re-doing the entire landing page and started a new ad. Thanks again for your help!!
LOVE the new version! Go you. :)
Blatant rip off but here it goes:
We’re scared of numbers. The numbers in our bank accounts, the numbers on the office clocks, the numbers on the bathroom scale, the number of years we have left.
Be the change you wish to see in yourself. Sign up for a 6 week online health challenge and you will no longer be fearful of numbers. Enrol now ==> bit.ly/spencerschallenge
SPENCER! I’m so sorry for the delay on this – your comment got lost in my inbox!
I really like this ad copy a lot. The only thing I might add is “Why not start right now?” after the “Be the change” line, just to add a little more urgency.
Have you already tried out this ad copy? How did it go? Let me know, and again, sorry for leaving you hanging!
Hi Laura this post is golden! Here is how my copy looks like. I run it in Feb. but I only got 7 opt ins. I have now tweaked it after reading your post. You critique will be highly appreciated.
Copy:
Want to grow your business with Facebook? Grab your FREE guide here and I’ll show you 15 ways you can create visual content on Facebook that will get you engagement and help generate you leads from your PERFECT target audience.
In this guide, I share with you:
Why you need to understand the nuances of Facebook
How you can tweak your posts so they don’t sound sales-y
The difference between native and non native content.
How to use images that will get you Likes, Comments, Shares or Clicks on Facebook.
How to schedule your posts.
The two FREE image making tools that will get your content noticed by your ideal audience.
Landing page: http://thevirtualassistantusa.com/free-ebook/
Hi Claire this post is golden! Here is an ad I put up on Facebook last month. I got 7 Opt ins. After reading your post I tweaked it and am planning on running it again. Your critique will be highly appreciated.
Copy:
Want to grow your business with Facebook? Grab your FREE guide here and I’ll show you 15 ways you can create visual content on Facebook that will get you engagement and help generate you leads from your PERFECT target audience.
In this guide, I share with you:
Why you need to understand the nuances of Facebook
How you can tweak your posts so they don’t sound sales-y
The difference between native and non native content.
How to use images that will get you Likes, Comments, Shares or Clicks on Facebook.
How to schedule your posts.
The two FREE image making tools that will get your content noticed by your ideal audience.
Landing Page: http://thevirtualassistantusa.com/free-ebook/
Hi Wambui! I feel like your bullet points (the part after “I share with you” need a little work. Check out this new post and see if you can give them another go: https://clairepells.com/landing-page-copy/
Also I’d get rid of any mention of you (like “I share with you”). Try “You’ll learn/discover” or something like that instead!
It’s so nice to hear from you Claire – thanks so much for your feedback I definitely will clean it up. Thanks for the link to the post. I will let you know how I do with the ad. Take care!
Hi Claire I apologize I did not mean to take up so much real estate on your blog by posting an image of my ad copy – I tried to delete the first one and reposted text only. Again if the image shows up it was not my intention. Thanks for sharing your wisdom!
Hi Claire,
Thank you very much for your post. It helped me a lot crafting my facebook ads. Here is my list:
Post Text:
– Did you know that your iPhone 6 can be better protected than with a case?
– Dangerous Flimsy Screen Protectors Are No More Effective Then No Protection! If Anything, They Just Make Things Worse.
– You Can’t Trust the Screen Protector from the Local Store! Take a Second Look Before You Use any iPhone 6 Screen Protectors.
– If You Have an iPhone 6, Make Sure You Know the Facts about Screen Protectors: iPhone screen protected by a special designed screen protector, then most leading screen protectors.
– Click this link and I´ll show you how to preserve the full resale price for your used iPhone 6
– Click this link and I´ll show you how to avoid any ugly scratches on your iPhone 6 screen
– Click this link and I´ll show you how to apply an invisible protection on your iPhone 6 screen.
– Click this link and I´ll show you how to avoid any ugly bubbles underneath your iPhone 6 screen protection.
– Click this link and I´ll show you how your iPhone 6 absorbs any impacts without cracking.
– Having annoying bubbles underneath your iPhone 6 screen protector?
– Afraid of getting scratches on your iPhone 6?
– Willl you want to sell your iPhone 6 for a higher resale price?
– Ever had a cracked iPhone 6 screen and needed to repair it?
– Do you want to protect the most vulnerable and expensive part of your iPhone 6?
Headline:
– Learn How Protect Your iPhone 6 Using the Simplest Trick
Description:
– Never subject your iPhone 6 to any scratches again.
Link to my Opt-in page: https://as-tools.leadpages.net/winstonprotection25/
Looking forward for your feedback.
Dieter
Hi Claire,
Thanks for sharing your insights.
I’m planning to try some Facebook advertising for a client that operates high-end senior living communities in Canada.
Headline: Outstanding seniors living has arrived in Calgary!
Text: Turn your dream of a lifelong vacation into reality. Take a dip in the salt-water pool, read your favorite book in the courtyard, enjoy a movie in the theatre, take advantage of the games room complete with shuffleboard and billiards table. Pamper yourself at the spa and beauty salon. Participate in frequent excursions and special events. Need a ride? A concierge is at your service. Our mission is to satisfy your needs and enrich your experiences.
Link Description: Seeking an exceptional seniors living solution in Calgary?
Headline: Enjoy outstanding seniors living in Forest Hill!
Text: Turn your dream into reality. Elegant seniors living in the heart of Forest Hill. Live in a stunning architecturally designed community featuring luxurious suites, a fashionable spa and beauty salon, specially designed fitness equipment, and sophisticated dining. Need a ride or assistance with a parcel? A concierge is at your service. Our mission is to satisfy your needs and enrich your experiences.
Link Description: Seeking the finest seniors living residence in Toronto?
Great article and thanks for sharing Claire. To be honest, I stand right next to you on what you enjoy in regards to targeting and well for me, diving into the analytics. Just like you, my copy is a serious issue for me because usually Im not sure how to purpose it. I work for a CPG company that wants my job to target new customers in new geographic areas that has never heard of the company/brand. The issue here is only certain retailers in certain geographic regions carry our product thus creating such a difficult targeting criteria. How would you suggest writing copy ?
This helped a lot, thank you!
You’re so welcome, Jose!
Good tips and i enjoyed the party!
So glad to hear it, Shelly! :D
Hello Claire!
Thank you for this write-up, it’s powerful.
My Name is Elizabeth and I run 2 businesses namely Food and Interior Design.
I’m trying to run the Facebook ad campaign for the food and I want to get it right and I’ll love you to please help me get it right.
My campaign is for the busy people who don’t have time to cook and for those who spend a huge sum of money eating out.
My Headline
Too busy to cook the quality of food you eat? We are in existence to solve that problem.
Text
Click on the link below to sign up for my free bottle of wine and you’ll discover 6ways I have been solving the feeding problem for those who are too busy to cook by providing them with healthy and affordable meals that enriched and enhances the quality of life.
Thanks for your time Claire
Great post Claire. Let’s face it, writing great ad copy is not the easiest thing in the world and there is a great learning curve that comes with getting good ad it. You’ve shortened that curve with this post by making FB ad copy easy to understand and effective with great examples. I think that even a beginner can take this info and start writing ads that get clicks. And now that people can watch videos inside their FB newsfeeds, combining this concept with video will be extremely powerful.
I dunno who you are and frankly I don’t know how I ended up on your page, but I had a lot of fun reading your article. =)
Love the style.
haha :D same story with me !!
Thanks , Really Helped me . appreciate
Thanks for the write up Claire. This is my first time using fb ads, and I’m racking my brain on how to write attractive copy! Any tips on what to include on my ad copy for my page?
Wow! Well said.
How I wished I could come up with something Cathy to compels clicks with shorter character like that of facebook?
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Thanks
You are good at what you do.
Just learnt a lot from this piece.
Hi Claire! After a year of testing ads and going no where, I finally found your article!!
I’ve been running ad copy changes for like page ads and I can’t get below .18
My winner so far is “First time mom over 40 shares her love of family, fitness, and funny mom stuff. Like my page for awesome workout videos.”
So after reading your article, I see i need to change the beginning. But what else can I say besides “like my page?” Granted, I am trying to get page likes, but is there something else that could be better or should I run w/just changing the beginning part?
I hate reading. But your article kept me reading. Great share. Thank you for this.:)
thank you very much
I don’t know how I ended up here, coz I have never heard of you, but I am so glad I did. Thanks for the tips Claire.